Saturday, 22 December 2007

Task1: APA

We’ve all heard of Asda, Tescos, Sainsbury’s and other supermarket chain stores. They would usually be in densely populated areas because it makes it more convenient to buy groceries or other things we need. But we must not neglect the smaller local shops that wait for you round the corner.

There are at least over fifty small shops located around your town that are overwhelmed by monstrous superstores. People that own these small businesses would struggle to attract more customers if those grand supermarkets give better deals that are unprofitable or a better variety of food. The last thing they wouldn’t want to happen is become bankrupt. The percentage of unemployment would fly sky high and poverty would plague the town all because of a large supermarket built nearby.

Similarly, the town is already saturated with shops and supermarkets. Most of them sell similar products and there isn’t much variation. There is already some supermarket chain stores built here and it’s pointless to build a business that sells the same thing. We’ve got enough supermarkets that provide us the things we need and more of them is just wasting the land.

Another point is that, there aren’t a lot of open areas for leisure. When I was a kid it was difficult to play outside since there were no parks or fields. I had to play in the streets with my friends and we end up breaking windows if we start a game of football. You wouldn’t want a naive child to break your windows or disturb you so why not let nature remove your worries and give children the greatest gift you have for them.

Furthermore, the land can be used to give the town a better image. It could be decorated with flowers and ponds also it could be used for festivals like Christmas and have a tree sparkle during the darkest winter nights and warm you in the coldest winter days. It makes the environment more interesting and everyone would be really disappointed to be used to build a supermarket.

In conclusion, the open land can be used for many things. Even though it would bring money to the community and attract more people to the town if a supermarket were to be built there but the open land is used as part of our daily lives. You wouldn’t want to wake up to a towering infrastructure that you’ve created would you?


3 comments:

no.7 said...

i failed this one. it don't seem to be effective enough i think... (X_X)

Anonymous said...

Hey No.7

i really like you work, a very good attempt but however like you said its not very effective and i think you could use more of the 'tools' rule of three etc...to make it effective.

Well done! and keep up the good work.

:)

Shiningstar said...

Good attempt.
The first half was a bit confusing(for me)but deeper into it it became a really good essay.I especially liked your conclusion.
To improve it you should have used more persuasive techniques.
Well done though!