Friday, 21 December 2007

Task 1: ARC

Money, bits of paper that we value almost more than some things we really need in life. It buys items we need, popularity and even freedom although it isn’t easy earning it. But if we’re fortunate enough, what can we do if we suddenly became filthy rich?

Banks have credit cards or debit cards for people to instantly buy things they want but misusing credit cards could create an awfully large sum of debt that we must pay back. Especially young adults which blindly use it to buy things that are in fashion or amazes them. However, suddenly becoming extremely rich could help us pay off those debts or loans which shows that it could liberate us from any financial problems.

Another point is that becoming rich unexpectedly could improve the quality of people's lives. The cost of services or products become insignificant to us if we had a huge amount of money and we could easily go on a deluxe flight to L.A or buy the latest gaming consoles. This shows that becoming intensely wealthy have the power to manipulate our minds to think that the value of something is insignificant yet also improve the quality of other things.

On the other hand, it changes the image and popularity of a person if they use it to help charities and save lives. It gives guilt and pressure because if you don't help those who needs it, it shows that you're selfish and arrogant. This means that money is like a drug thats hard to give up for any reason and the withdrawal symptoms is like the sorrow, anger or regret of having to give it.

Similarly, it makes us become arrogant, ignorant and self-centered because of the value of money. It helps us to live and travel because everything has a cost these days. As a result, money can change our personality because it used a lot almost for everything.

Overall, money is in fact important to our lives. We could buy anything or do anything if we suddenly became rich. But excess amount of it could blind us with greed and power and loosing all of it could make us feel weak since we rely on it everyday in our lives. Therefore, suddenly becoming rich is a bad thing because we mainly want it for ourselves instead of sharing it with others.

11 comments:

no.7 said...

my first attempt. A bit dodgy i think and could've been better but i done it late at night so yeh :P.

Vanessa Hoang said...

i think this essay is really good. the use of language is quick and at a steady pace although i think you should make more points as the essay seems short. it's very good ^.^

no.7 said...

i dont like elongating essays i like it to be straight to the point . I have the problem of shortening my essays every time i check it and its rather hard to lengthen it since i end up waffling. Thanks for the compliment though XD

Yaqz786 said...

Nice essay ;)like how its short and sleeky and gets to the point straight away

vigilant said...

This is a gud essay. to sme extend it cud have been lengthend and in my view the introduction seems a bit week but maybe it's just me
the use of language is gud with all the the persuasive techniques
original ideas for the advantages and dis advantages
VERY GUD

Lee Lee Xox

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no.7 said...

How was the intro weak from your view and how did it become persuasive vigilant? It looks short but they're actually paragraphs when i typed it out.Also 6 paragraphs is the limit for me to write an APA/ARC in exams so i kept it the same doing this. Its quality not quantity for me.

thanks for the comments too ^__^

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no.7 said...

I forgot to ask WHY AM I THE ONLY PERSON BOTHERED ABOUT THIS!!!???
why?why?why? (?_?)

englishguru said...

That's a VERY good question, no.7! Where are all the rest of your class, all of whose parents returned the reply slip saying they would be encouraging their children to make the most of this blog to help them prepare for the Jan 19th exam???

Well done you, though. Let's just hope the others come on board soon.

Anonymous said...

Hey..!

Really good essay and like the others said its short and gets to the point.

Well done.

And don't worry, i'm going to join you soon. :)

Shiningstar said...

Well done no.7,I think your essay was really good.A bit on the short side but it gets straight to the point and answers the question instead of waffling on.
Your use of language was really effective and you looked on both sides of the story really well.

Well done!!